Deceived – Part 1 New York (Deceived #1) by Eve CarterDeceived by Eve Carter
Published November 2012
Series: Deceived #1
Genres: Contemporary Romance, Office Romance
two-stars
Format: eBook
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When Chloe Swanson, an innocent mid-western college graduate, lands her dream job in New York City, she doesn't realize what kind of a ride she's in for.
It doesn't take long before her boss, the charming and sharp businessman Patrick Collins, deceives her into being part of his plan to land the biggest account of his life.


However, he never expected that he would fall for her. Suddenly, he finds himself trapped between a ruthless billionaire client, who has her own eyes set on Patrick, and his deep affection for the beautiful Chloe.
What follows is a sensual and passionate journey of self-discovery, as Chloe faces the harsh reality of jealousy, love and money in the big city.
Stimulating, amusing and highly arousing, Deceived is a romance that will excite and titillate your senses.

The reason why I actually started reading Deceived is because my blog’s Twitter account had been followed by author Eve Carter. And I thought, I could as well give it a go in order to return the favour! And I must say the cover and title where rather appealing. At first, I was disappointed that the book had only 120 pages, but in the end I guess it was better that way… If you are afraid of spoilers you might not want to read on, but the whole book is such a mess you wouldn’t be able to write a review without any spoilers.

So about the plot: Chloe Swansson is assistant to her boss Patrick Collins, for whom she has a fling. She’s a young graduate, and he’s 38. One day, out of the blue, he gets close to her. They make out, they have multiple orgasms, he wines and dines her several times, confesses his love and then she finds him kissing another woman. I guess that’s what most stories are about and who cares if you read this type of scenario over and over again as long as you get attached to the characters, the story and whatnot, but here, it just feels as if Eve Carter was in a rush to put this scenario into 120 pages as fast as she could to get it over with. There is no description at all, no explanations, everything just happens out of the blue and seems totally unreal.

And the way the story ends is totally irrational (I guess it’s supposed to be what Eve Carter calls a cliffhanger, but I don’t see it that way): Chloe knows she has been set up by the exact same woman Patrick kisses, so that she could witness the scene and get angry. He runs after her and tries to explain, says it’s not mutual, confesses his love, yet she doesn’t want to hear anything and still runs away. Duh! Not an ounce of rationality, but well…

What’s more, the writing was strange, apart from the fact that it was not descriptive at all, it was blatant that Eve Carter used strange word associations to make her little descriptions (especially the sex scenes) more “interesting”:

“He stood before me, his diamond cutter bulging within his pants” – This does not refer to a tool but to an actual man’s penis. Okay…
“Like a piston with a crank shaft, he pumped me hard….vibratory jolts cascading throughout my entire body, domino style.” – Right, domino style…
“I arched and moaned, voraciously wanting more, his tactile swirling and rubbing, coaxing me into a pyretic frenzy of desire.” – Stop it. Now.

Other than that Eve Carter has some serious proofreading issues. Most books have those issues, and I never care to mention, but when you’re just overwhelmed with bad spelling, misplaced punctuation and the likes scattered all over a mere 120 pages, it gets really annoying. Oh and when you spell the sound “Awe” instead of “Awww” two to three times in 3 pages, it is definitely not a typo… I am being harsh, right?

But well, this is my honest opinion, this book is just plain mediocre, and yet this is a nice word I’m using here. Thank god it was so short. I will definitely be reading the sequels out of curiosity and in order to see if this gets worse. I honestly don’t think it could.

Detailed Rating
Storyline
1 Stars
Characters
2 Stars
Writing
0.5 Stars
All the feels
1 Stars
Overall: two-stars